קטע קצר באנגלית רמה קלה, מישהו בבקשה יכול לתקן לי אותו?

every day the students at school have to come with a school t-shirt,
there are students who like this idea but on another hand there are many students who dont like this idea.
hi my name is . and my opinion about this issue is that the students need the place where they can be themself in school, there are many students who feel they can dress up who they want to feel good with themself.
if the school doesnt make a decision to change that so many students still feel bad in school about their t-shirt.
if there are students who love this they can still dress up in the school t-shirt.
it will be good for the students if they can make this decision by themselves and not the school to do this for them.

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שואל השאלה:
מתוך 100 כמה אתם נותנים לכתיבה שכתבתי בלי התיקונים?