כתבתי שיר באנגלית, יש בו שגיאות?

they keep hurting me**
like arrows in my heart***
you like seeing me bleeding on the ground***
why are you so cruel to me***
you are scaring me**
בהצלחה:)

they* keep hurting me
you are* scaring me
וממש אהבתי!

can't you see?
the words you said to me
the keep on hurting me
like an arrow through my heart

can't you see?
you keep ignoring me
you like to see me bleeding
on the ground


oh, please
don't leave me
with my demons alone
with my feelings alone
it's hell, i'm in hell
and you left me behind
now i'm dead inside

can't you see?
i'm human just like you
i'm begging for your love
oh can't you see the truth?

can't you feel?
i really really love you
why are you so cruel to me
stop it, love, you're scaring me

oh, please
don't leave me
with my demons alone
with my feelings alone
it's hell, i'm in hell
and you left me behind
now i'm dead inside

oh mommy, daddy,
i feel the end
it's here, can't you hear?
it's here, it's near...

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