אפשר חוות דעת על שיר שכתבתי??

I sued and taped my mind
To stop my thoughts tonight
From choking from behind
From choking from behind
I glanced over at the sky
And noticed a little light
It told me i'll be alright
It told me i will be alright

So i wiped my blood away
And i got up on my feet
All the bruses on my neck
They began to finally heal

Started walking towards there
To the bolder happy side
I ignited the end
And i waved death goodbye

הוא לא גמור, אבל זה כרגע. מה דעתכם?