כאלה שיודעים אנגלית זה תקין לרשום ככה?

בעיקרון נראה לי שכן, אבל יש שם כמה דברים שאפשר לשנות:

i really liked the song "name of song" because i really love the singer, demi lovato.
the words in the song are very deep, beautiful and everyone who hears this song can think about how he becomes stronger in his personal life. this song has
a great meaning for me and i really love to hear it
ממליץ אבל לקבל גם עצות מאחרים כי אני לא בטוח בזה

יותר נכון להגיד i like, כי את עדיין אוהבת אותו.
בכללי זה נכון אבל תרשי לי קצת לשפר את הניסוח:
i really like the song because of the singer, demi lovato.
also i can relate to it because the song is has an extremely powerful message, its beautiful, and anyone who hears it can think of a various ways to become stronger in life, just like demi did.
this song has a great meaning behind it and i enjoy hearing it.