מישהו יכול לתקן לי פה שגיאות דקדוק ותחביר (אנגלית, קטע ראפ)

when the world becomes too real
i pretend that i can stand now all the worries
i want to move on, move on
alternatives depends on something distant that i can't see
i'm anxious to move on

but ho no
stop
this is the time to sit here patiently
around the table, cookies, debate and ;to discussing the question of thelegalization of laziness
maybe it was a necessity,
the life goes on and on and on
it will be my best chanse to -- change
to hit every single target in this range
i need to lock up the dragons,
, lock up my passion
lock up my desire to deny that the time that passes and i'm still lying to myself

תשפר קצת את בחירת המילים שלך ותבדוק בפעם הבאה אם הם בכלל הולכים ביחד כמו the legalization of laziness, זה לא הגיוני