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Oh, when we f*ck
Oh, when we f*ck
Oh, when we f*ck
Oh, when we f*ck
The years go by so fast
I want them to forever-ever-ever last
Wanna be a teen again, feel young
Not worring about my dirty tongue
It's like I never really appreciated
It all seemed to me simulated
Missing all the innocent times
Instead of growing up, committing crimes
Bitch.