היי, אשמח שתגידו את דעתכם על קטע שכתבתי

אני יודעת שזה לא מאוד טוב אבל אשמח לביקורת בונה.

Imagine you were a tree
Those with the pink flowers and the green leaves
Those who bring you joy every time you see.
Now imagine that like in the fall all the flowers wither
But not all of them at ones
They fall one after one
And in the end they're all gone.

Drew it in your mind and imagine
The leaves fall and fly around
And people step on them because it's fun.
And drew in your mind a naked tree with no protection
And a lonely girl who's tired from emotions.